TerryeoNov 12th, 2007 - 15:55:05

Instead of criticism and controversy shoehorned into the article at nearly every paragraph, it would have been nicer to have read that the oak table was used in Poland, rather than in Germany, because that would put a context to the controversy. I'm trying to say, rather than writing ABOUT controversy, write about the SUBJECT. Then, as the reader sequentially meets the information, introduce the controversial aspect that prompted the Polish filming.

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